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Dimethyl Succinate- by ~Nosdi:iconNosdi:





I know that you are home
When I hear the door slam
Shut, and the walls reverberate,
Knocking pictures from the
Walls that I will simply
Pick up once again tomorrow.
But now, I hear your footsteps
Thudding down the hallway,
And I back into the corner,
As you enter the room.
The color drains away as if
You had wiped the color from
The walls and put a lid on
The sun, so that all is left is
The gray, the white, and the
Far-too-dark black.
There is only the dark black
Shadow falling across your
Face, and the pale,
Stark white covering my own face
As I shut my eyes, covering them
With pepper- gray hands.
I never even hear you yell, when
You pick up the bright, white vase
From the dark, black pedestal, and
Suddenly, there is color in the room.

The dark, flowing red of my blood
On your hands.
©2004-2009 ~Nosdi
:iconnosdi:

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I accidentally made it into a scrap, so I had to submit it again.

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:icondragon-wolf:
Whoa. This is breath taking. I like how you brought out the cut scene with the color leaving the room, makes it sound like one of those old horror movies. Overall bery nice.

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*Oh how sick he seems, what can we do?
-Take the knife from the drawer, nurse hurry.
-Now what Doctor?
-Cut out his heart, and he will feel no more.
:iconjaymp:
If you don't want it as a scrap, delete it from there so you only have it in one spot. Just a side comment.

Anywho...great poem, you can feel the fear and tension very clearly. The entire color thing was interesting and brought a LOT to the poem. I loved the "far-to-black" line. Excellent imagery. You did great, as always.

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At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet. ~Plato.
:iconnosdi:
Okay, I'll go delete it now. And stop being so nice. You're too kind. Lol. I do appreciate your comments, though. :D
:iconjaymp:
lol, I'm just being honest! There's a difference in that and nice. lol. Glad you appreciate them...you already know I appreciate yours.

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At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet. ~Plato.
:iconnosdi:
Do you? Yay. Put something up so I can comment again. Lol.
:iconantitrustalone224:
*hugz* so emotional love it. Especially the cut scene, everything flowed buetifuly. Definatley buetiful words from a buetiful mind. nice work.

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writing another form of insanity put to good use.
:iconjaymp:
lol, I am as we speak.

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At the touch of love, everyone becomes a poet. ~Plato.
:iconnosdi:
Aw, thanks. My mind is not beautiful, though. I don't think so...if it is, it's beautiful in one of those dark, sadistic ways. Lol, thanks for commenting.

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